G'day Maddi. I loved the way that you used the sheet music to bring back her daughter in a way and the positive memories associated with that. The comparison of her relationship with her daughter to the music was created a very strong sense of tone. Great job, and I hope to see more of your work.
Yo Georgia. I also had a stuffed bear when I was little named Button, who lost his button nose after my dog got ahold of him, but the memory of his button nose will live on. Anyway, your narrative had an excellent sense of voice, and told a story of as time went on about your relationship between you and Dolphie. I hope to see more insights like this in your writing, as little snippets of life such as this can tell you a lot about a person.
Howdy Winter.
I like the way the second paragraph serves as almost a break from the girl's daily life. It makes the character feel more fleshed out, and how the clinking of bottles is a reference to fear.
I like the imagery used in this story, so good work and stay awesome!
Thank you for checking in on your classmates!
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